Critque this flier please
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danpauselius
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Not until you ask politely
Scott Hayward
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That poor dog...having to act like he is enjoying that hug! Looks good if you are marketing to Senior Citizens. The font (cursive) is a bit difficult to read but it makes the flyer look personal.
On the next flyer ask to use Larry Cobbs platinum blond model (from his web site) and one of us can loan you a Pit Bull.
Let us know how your ad works out.
On the next flyer ask to use Larry Cobbs platinum blond model (from his web site) and one of us can loan you a Pit Bull.
Let us know how your ad works out.
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You've got seconds to catch someones attention and start building interest. Make it easy for the reader to understand your message. Granted, my eyes aren't as sharp as they used to be but I had to look to find what you were selling. Ideally, it should jump off the page.
Your logo is bold, but people don't buy logos. Your pic is cute but doesn't explain who you are, at first glance it had the feel of an ad for veterinary services. Your offer says "clean three areas," why not mention carpet cleaning? Your list of services is sorta buried towards the bottom and, while I like the font, I'd suggest Arial or AvantGarde simply because it's easier to read and it looks more like a list of information someone needs to help evaluate your offer.
We learn to read from left to right and top to bottom. Start your story where the reader's eye meets paper.
Some food for though......as a basic layout look at this and see if it conveys the basics of your message faster.
Your logo is bold, but people don't buy logos. Your pic is cute but doesn't explain who you are, at first glance it had the feel of an ad for veterinary services. Your offer says "clean three areas," why not mention carpet cleaning? Your list of services is sorta buried towards the bottom and, while I like the font, I'd suggest Arial or AvantGarde simply because it's easier to read and it looks more like a list of information someone needs to help evaluate your offer.
We learn to read from left to right and top to bottom. Start your story where the reader's eye meets paper.
Some food for though......as a basic layout look at this and see if it conveys the basics of your message faster.
Ron Lippold
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Jeremy do what appeals to you these hacks don't know any better
Ron Lippold
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I'm sorry I agree I bought his pdq post cards and they work great they have all ready paid for them self
Scott Hayward
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I am an advertising Hack. Wayne is Golden.
Jeremy, disregard my platinum blond girl with the Pit Bull idea.
Wayne, that looks really good. You got all of our attention.
Jeremy, disregard my platinum blond girl with the Pit Bull idea.
Wayne, that looks really good. You got all of our attention.
